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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 993



    Description:
        for a girl i like. please comment on it.


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    It's 3:00 o'clock in the morning
    I stiil can't sleep
    thinking about you makes me so weak
    Now girl follow me and the beat
    You'll be fine
    just give it time
    It someone goes by
    And doesn't look at you second time
    that should be a fine
    Girl you should feel fine
    You got me wondering how you got so fly?

    It's 4:00 o'clock
    I still can't sleep
    Thinking about you makes me so weak.
    I look into your eyes
    there as blue as the ocean
    there as deep as space
    I always get lost in those beautiful eyes
    It's alright to cry
    those tears are as beautiful as diamonds
    in a well lit room.

    It 6:00
    I still can't sleep
    thinking about you makes me so weak.
    This is been going on all week.
    Every time i see you
    it makes me want to be with you even more.




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 12:13:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was kinda cute! i like it! i hope the girl like u back! good job! im going to read more of your work! thanks for comenting on my poem! keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really sweet poem, it must be nice feeling so in love with someone; I hope this girl you wrote it for gets a chance to read it.
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      love your setup and the overall feeling. Write more. One sentence seems out of place with the mood though, the "girl you got me wondering how you get so fly" but other than that, loved it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by BlazeFlamme | [ Reply to This ]


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