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    dots Submission Name: Beaudots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 786
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 462



    Description:
       I wanted to see what it would be like in french...lol I thought it was cool, so I posted it.


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    dotsBeaudots
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    Beau coeur de bois d'ébène,
    pour l'âme brûlée de la haine.
    Le sang cramoisi ne passe plus,
    par la beauté noire, pendant qu'elle
    arrête immobile,
    au-dessus d'un regroupement de l'égoutture de sang,
    forment sa peau pâle.
    Boitez ainsi...
    pourquoi a fait ceci se produisent....
    quelqu'un ainsi en valeur la vie...
    maintenant sans vie, immobile... complètement.




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 15:53:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol. i just like the originality of the french translation. i didn't understand any of it but i'll give you the credit for sitting down and figuring it out. good job.~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh i adore french ...French can take a story about pea's and make it sound sexy and sensual ....Glad you posted it in this translation ....Good job
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      I cannot really read French, but I was able to go back and find it in English. The imagery is so vivid concerning the colors. Though the subject was not pleasant, it was not ment to be. I still enjoyed this becuase of the color images. Also was able to follwo a little once I had read the English.
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]


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