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    dots Submission Name: That nightdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       going through rought time agian. trying not to end my life short by writing.

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    dotsThat nightdots

    I will never be able to forget
    that night.
    Every thing went wrong

    Can't take the yelling any more
    I'm ready to face death
    The knife in my hand
    can show you that Iím ready for death.

    I will never be able to forget
    that night.
    Every thing went wrong

    these pills are saying my name
    my whole life is a big game.

    The pain is not the knife going
    into my arm and
    the blood coming from my arm
    like a rapid river.

    The pain
    is you not paining attention and not caring
    the pain is you not caring for what I need.
    It's always all about you.

    I will never be able to forget
    that night.
    Every thing went wrong

    Thinking about my body
    hanging from my roof
    gives me a sense of me happiness.

    I will never be able to forget
    that night.
    Every thing went wrong

    you screaming at me
    every else blaming me
    or making me do there work for them.
    You wonder what makes me this way.

    I will never be able to forget
    that night.
    Every thing went wrong.

    Taking those pills
    I'm looking at this hill
    and I realize I can't climb this hill.
    Making me want to end this life with these pills and this knife.

    I will never be able to forget
    that night.
    Every thing went wrong

    now Iím sitting in the hospital
    worry about what Iím going to do
    with my life.

    Or is this knife going to end my life
    so I don't have to worry about it any more.
    This life is so unpredictable
    all I can do is
    wait for tomorrow and see what happens to me.

    Submitted on 2005-02-27 17:28:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You wanna know something? I feel this way tonite too, so I can totally relate to how you are feeling. It is hard when no'one seems to care, isn't it?
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      weird...i like it though,its a great poem
    i use to feel this way,wait i still do it sucks well its better that you write about it then do it,well good write hope to here more from you
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]

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