the simplicity of this poem made the meaning raw and apperant. It made me feel olonley, and made me want to run up and embrace you in a hug. Peple can be so cruel, telling you lies but making them truths, its hard I know, But hang in there I feel that this could be an excellent peice if oyou went back and revised it adding meafores, and allowingthe reader to pull the emotions out themselves, add more discriptions and comparisiomns and it will be an amazing peice. thanks for the post much love kaity
this was a very simple poem with much of repetition. i loved the idea of making it so simple, so people would get the point. it was very fluent and though it was as simple as it was, you could still get the emotions of it. i was feeling kind of full with emotions when i started reading the poem, but towards the end it was kind of sucked out of me, and in the end i sat here with no feelings at all. and that's a pretty awesome feeling!
the last line was beautiful, i could see something beeing carved of wood; though it didn't have the shape of human, it still told you everything that needed to be told. yes, i like this one. good work