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    dots Submission Name: A love, My lovedots
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    Author: TDALBH
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 63/57/15
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 716
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Just say something, please be there. I need someone who makes sense to be there....


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    dotsA love, My lovedots
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    A love that could never be
    Wrapped in possibility
    And a will
    For everything

    A love that could never be
    Some how is
    And yet still is not

    A love that could never be
    Given wings to set it free
    Holds itself down
    Iím not going anywhere

    A love that could never be
    Gives us hope
    Even as it tears us,
    Itself
    Apart

    A love that could never be
    Burns inside of me
    Making me die
    Making me fly
    Making me feel alive

    A love that could never be
    Makes me feel
    Like living forever
    And dying tonight

    A love that could never be
    Pulls tears from my eyes
    And puts a smile on my face
    Each time you walk by

    A love that could never be
    Makes me feel like a fool
    Makes us look like
    Criminals

    A love that could never be
    A love
    My love




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 19:42:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was very good. the only thing i thought needs some fixing is the punctuation. otherwise i thought it was lovely dear, just lovely.

    xox stef
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by stefanie mae | [ Reply to This ]
      I cry everytime I read this, I'm not sure why, but I do. It's such a beautiful poem... I think I cry cause of everything I'm going through. I think this is wonderful... I could never have put those words together so beautifully... now tell me, are there really over a million sarahs in the US alone?? lol alright ttyl
    (i know this wasn't much feedback, but i couldn't think this time.)

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    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hell ya, I really love this poem. I feel this one to the fullest. Every word you use is perfect to discribe love, how you worded this part was my favorite. How you mention that love gives us hope nomatter how bad we're hurt or heartbroken because theres always hope that the one you love who hurt you will return and then you'll be in heaven. and how even though it brings you hope it also pulls the fear that that hope will only hurt you by never comeing true and makes you want o die right there. I love it, good, good job. It's going to my fav.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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