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Trapped


Author: curiosityskitty
ASL Info:    31/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 149 /149 /30
Words: 216
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Trapped



You're in my head, I know you
You blind me but, I see you
I try but can't escape you
You're driving me insane

Imprisoned by the touch of you
Paralyzed when I think of you
Hypnotized by the sight of you
Seduced by lies you tell

Tremble when you’re close to me
Need your body next to me
You're like a drug to me
You're the needle, I'm the vein

You provoke the devil in me
Your touch fuels the fire in me
You arouse the need in me
You cause my heart to race

You place your lips upon me
The way you feel excites me
The hands you place upon me
Make it hard for me to breath

I feel your mouth upon me
It awakens hunger in me
and spreads inside of me
Like an all-consuming fire

I feel your breath on me
Your warmth envelopes me
You steal my soul from me
Leave nothing in its place

You take the light from me
Cause darkness to enshroud me
You think that it will blind me
To the web of lies you weave

I can't break free from you
I am possessed by you
Can only think of you
Trapped by my desire




Submitted on 2005-02-27 21:56:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  stanza 7, leave would sound alot flowier as leaving...excellent piece, powerful piece...great write...title...hmmm...how about 'Soul Stealer?' or something along those lines...or 'i hate our love' lol perfect piece!
| Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]


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