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    dots Submission Name: untitled as of yetdots
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    Author: curiosityskitty
    ASL Info:    30/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 145/149/30
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 360
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1349



    Description:
       This comment is to those of you out there who just can't wait to tell me "too many you's and me's"...Don't bother. Any other HELPFUL comments are welcome and appreciated. Help with the title would be nice. :-)


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    dotsuntitled as of yetdots
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    You're in my head, I know you
    Distort my vision, I see you
    I try but can't escape you
    You're driving me insane

    Imprisoned by the touch of you
    Paralyzed when I think of you
    Hypnotized by the sight of you
    Seduced by lies you tell

    Tremble when you’re close to me
    Need your body next to me
    You're like a drug to me
    You're the needle, I'm the vein

    You provoke the devil in me
    Your touch fuels the fire in me
    You arouse the need in me
    You cause my heart to race

    You place your lips upon me
    The way you feel excites me
    The hands you place upon me
    Make it hard for me to breath

    I feel your mouth upon me
    The way you taste hungers me
    I need to feel you in me
    Like this all-consuming fire

    I feel your breath on me
    I feel your warmth surround me
    You take my soul from me
    Leave nothing in its place

    You take the light from me
    Cause darkness to enshroud me
    You think that it will blind me
    To the web of lies you weave

    I can't break free from you
    I am possessed by you
    Can only think of you
    Trapped by my desire




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 21:56:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      stanza 7, leave would sound alot flowier as leaving...excellent piece, powerful piece...great write...title...hmmm...how about 'Soul Stealer?' or something along those lines...or 'i hate our love' lol perfect piece!
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]



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