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    dots Submission Name: The Man of my Dreamsdots
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    Author: trmbngrl
    ASL Info:    20/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 65/62/22
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 404
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       just the man of my dreams...


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    dotsThe Man of my Dreamsdots
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    At the stoke of midnight
    My heart beats faster,
    Beats with the pulse of the gong
    Ripping through the silence
    As my heart does...
    Thud one...
    Thud two...
    Echoing its cadence that rings
    Waking the dead
    And the dreaming.

    My steps down the passageway
    Are also in mimic
    Of the chiming clock.
    Step three...
    Step four...
    Shaking at each throb
    Stumbling on each stroke.
    Fumbling through the chiming symphony.

    Now, stopped, looking down
    At the gentleman below,
    The bell has stopped ringing
    It’s as if my heart has stopped too.
    The shaking has gone
    Since my steps down have ceased
    And I feel as if time
    Has discontinued
    In this moment, gazing at him
    Eyes interlocking
    Souls interchanging...
    This is the man of my dreams.




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 21:57:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the scenes that youve taken me through to this beauty that lies before u...
    Is this a crush????

    beautifully written

    keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by ariesmind | [ Reply to This ]
      I pictured a girl dressed up for a prom here....It played out pretty well in my head.....*sigh* young love....People will always say that teens dont know what love is ...But i think they probebly have more of an idea then elder people....I could get shot for saying this ...But really ...Teens tend to love someone like they havnt been hurt before....And everything is new....Adults should follow their lead ...Anyway ....Im rambling ...This was beautiful ...treasure the butterflies and thudding heart ....make them count :)
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really neat, it reminds me of Cinderella or something, lol. I have a poem quite similar to the whole "step 1 with chimes" business, its called Dance, i don't know if I still have it on here though. Good job, its very nice, sets very nice scenes.
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]



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