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That's So Sweet


Author: Sebby
ASL Info:    14/Male/Timbaktu
Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 67 /78 /29
Words: 10
Class/Type: Haiku /Comedy
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Ha, and the writer's block wears off and inspiration flows with a vengeance!! Can you believe it, I wrote like 5 haikus and one poem in an hour; a very boring literature lesson...
This is just one of them, the rest are coming up soon.

Sebby


That's So Sweet



Dewdrops, glistened leaves
Bottleflies in waterwells
Drown those god-damned bugs...




Submitted on 2005-02-28 03:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really don't know what you are trying to say but that ha[ppens in a lot of Haikus I have noticed. Different interpretations to each reader and thats fine in my opinion. You see I had anb opinion of what I thought it would be about then I had another after I read it then I reread it and I had something totally different
What I got was the changing of the seasons and much of Gods creatures dont handle change all too well and some like our friend "the bugs" simply never made it out of that damn well[Am I close?] L.t
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  I really don't know what you are trying to say but that ha[ppens in a lot of Haikus I have noticed. Different interpretations to each reader and thats fine in my opinion. You see I had anb opinion of what I thought it would be about then I had another after I read it then I reread it and I had something totally different
What I got was the changing of the seasons and much of Gods creatures dont handle change all too well and some like our friend "the bugs" simply never made it out of that damn well[Am I close?] L.t
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  I really don't know what you are trying to say but that ha[ppens in a lot of Haikus I have noticed. Different interpretations to each reader and thats fine in my opinion. You see I had anb opinion of what I thought it would be about then I had another after I read it then I reread it and I had something totally different
What I got was the changing of the seasons and much of Gods creatures dont handle change all too well and some like our friend "the bugs" simply never made it out of that damn well[Am I close?] L.t
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  I really don't know what you are trying to say but that ha[ppens in a lot of Haikus I have noticed. Different interpretations to each reader and thats fine in my opinion. You see I had anb opinion of what I thought it would be about then I had another after I read it then I reread it and I had something totally different
What I got was the changing of the seasons and much of Gods creatures dont handle change all too well and some like our friend "the bugs" simply never made it out of that damn well[Am I close?] L.t
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  I really don't know what you are trying to say but that ha[ppens in a lot of Haikus I have noticed. Different interpretations to each reader and thats fine in my opinion. You see I had anb opinion of what I thought it would be about then I had another after I read it then I reread it and I had something totally different
What I got was the changing of the seasons and much of Gods creatures dont handle change all too well and some like our friend "the bugs" simply never made it out of that damn well[Am I close?] L.t
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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