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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    25/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 520/313/58
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Bytes: 633



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    Paradoxical nature, in a twisting sense
    Not elegiac, just randomly mixing drugs
    Yes a kind of field junky, no cold veins
    Striping reality apart, in a desolated pub
    Smoke hour after hour, not losing any
    Just another occasion appears any time
    Obviously a big, fat, procrastinator
    Not obscene, but becoming perverted
    Girls scout, bush hiding, stalking type
    Poet by choice, manic assassin by nature
    A goddamn’ spuned time crushing
    Monster mashing, fire engine, screaming
    Heavy chain-smoking, nicotine driven machine

    Mad, really…




    Submitted on 2005-02-28 11:17:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is great i like the word mixture you use it was almost diving a car to the extreme slowing down then crash and burn great write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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