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    dots Submission Name: This Is Why the Ribbons Tie...dots
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    Author: ViCiOuSWrItEr
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Desolate
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 890/865/108
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 907
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThis Is Why the Ribbons Tie...dots
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    Here I lay with these ribbons tied
    at times I find myself asking
    why, why?
    I live in a box
    a guard blocks my way
    and I can hear you pacing
    on the other side.
    I lean against the makeshift wall
    sometimes
    I can feel your heart beating.
    I cry to the darkness, the cardboard night
    which melts into sudden immense light
    and a hand extends out to me
    one comforting and caring
    a chest holds me
    one warm and wantin
    I know your hurt
    I know your pain
    You know mine
    you feel my shame
    we lay here these ribbons tied
    I finally stopped asking
    why, why?




    Submitted on 2005-02-28 12:08:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love your "why, why?" lines.

    and it's easy to picture your words.

    let me try and intepret:

    girl lives in a box, feels far from boy, but listens out for boy all the time. girl cries, suddenly something happens, melts the walls, boy can touch girl now, they hold hands, the world makes sense again.

    it's just about reaching out, isn't it?

    your words flow so well though. this is a beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by queenhenry | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm i would like to get some info about this.
    This reminds me of a bond between two people and one seemingly betrys the other, but thats in my head.
    Great write and ill be sure to check your other writes.

    ACE
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]


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