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    dots Submission Name: Told To Follow My Heart...dots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is on what I heard about last night about my crush. It's just so hard to do the right thing, but then, what IS the right thing? I know I should get awa, but my mind, and split heart are all lost...


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    dotsTold To Follow My Heart...dots
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    The actions
    You take with her.
    I'm amazed
    and intigued.
    But not in a good way.
    It's a way
    That throws my feelings for you
    Out the window.
    But like the boomerang
    They come back.
    I need to change
    This longing.
    Why do you
    Project to me
    That
    You don't like her?
    Others tell me different.
    Yet, I don't know what to believe.
    I'm told to follow my heart.
    But it's split in two by you
    Both shooting opposite ways.
    So when I need to follow
    My heart,
    I have nowhere to go
    But to follow my mind.
    Which is merely
    blank....




    Submitted on 2005-02-28 13:00:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this, simple but so true. I like your layout, works well. I don;t know if you realise but it relates to love aswell, having your heart torn by watching him with another girl. Don't get involved with him, us girls have this sixth sense thing. He likes her. Don't set yourself up with that, trust me. Godd write though, especially for your age. I am very impressed, it is alot more mature.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Star_searcher | [ Reply to This ]
      Teenaged crushes...Awwwwwww...Get your man girl. No seriously, if you think for one second that he likes the other girl, he does. Don't be silly. Break that boomerang in half and put it in the trash. Good write.

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    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      being young sucks and the crushes we get hurt. i aggree with X, if you think he likes her then he does, don't let that stop you! get out there and show him what he's missing by not being with you! as for the poem, it's cute, i like it**

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    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Crushes and love can find your heart torn and mind blank just as you illustrate. There was a small spelling error - "intiqued" I gathered was intrigued.
    I agree with xtremegentlemen - boomerang to bomb and let him be the one blank and sorry! Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this the first day it came out. I am still trying to figure out what its about. I understand it. I have an idea.. is it because of the thing you wanted to get together about.. cause you say
    The actions
    You take with her.
    I'm amazed
    and intigued.
    But not in a good way.
    It's a way
    That throws my feelings for you
    Out the window.

    like you know "hand"s.. but even if its not about that.. I still understand what you mean. One minute your in deep love.. Or puppy love.. Or whatever people call it now.. and the next it changes.. Cause of actions.. and other stuff. happens to me all the tome.. I know your hurt.. Because of that girl.. That took him.. But i think we all need to work on talking and not being afraid.. Something I think you are way better than I am.. and I am still shocked it isn't working. I am always late for everyone.. Like you noticed. But don't give up on Victor. He sounds liike a nice guy. Besides for some of his.. Past, future, present, actions that you think he has participated in.. You know what you think they are.. But when you are with him.. Whenever you feel that it is safe to talk about if.. Im sure you'll understand it more.. maybe you'll find out the truth possibly.. But wait until the right moment. Otherwise it can really become a bad effect..

    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there my dear. Whoo...crushes...those things can be so damned aggravating. I'm glad I got all that crushing business out of my system early. I do know exactly the kind of feeling you're describing here. Boys suck, that's just a golden fact that will probably never change. There is hope though, some of those boys do actually grow up to be good men. So keep the hopes high.

    I like the lines about the heart being split in two. I can tell you from experience that the feeling you're talking about there, confusion and never not knowing what decision to make, is one that you'll come across quite often. Love is one of those silly things that is complicated and simple all at once. It hurts sometimes but then again it's just as good as it is painful. If it's worth it though...that's what counts.

    From what I can tell by this piece, this guy you're longing for is a jerk. A guy that isn't direct and honest with you, is unsure of himself. And will probably end up hurting you in some way. A guy that really likes you will be straightforward with you and will display honesty. Seems to me like maybe this boy likes both you and that other girl, but is too afraid to choose one or the other for fear of losing both. Boys can be crappy little creatures. But really think about whether or not this kid is worth it. You have the benefit of being young and able to take direction with your life. As far as dating goes, make sure that you guard your emotions wisely and don't let some sweet talking boy with a cute face make you fall, when you can do better for yourself. Because I'm certain that you're phenomenal and deserve only the best. So don't let yourself settle for someone who doesn't think of you in that way.

    Anyhoo...hope that helps. Much love to ya. :-)
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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