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    dots Submission Name: Decadencedots
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    Author: melancholymaid
    ASL Info:    24/female/Tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 112/136/34
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Bytes: 394



    Description:
       Well, it is very short, and probably will not make very much sense to most people, but....Read and decipher as you wish.. Please don't be too harsh in your comments if you give any.......Thank you.

    A Doomed Maid,
    Samantha


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    dotsDecadencedots
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    The entrails of time are rotting away.
    And while we feed daily on the ashes of bliss,
    Our master is left to decay.

    How does Thanos not cry at constant?
    I will take a walk with him
    On any night or fateful day,
    For the Great Dawn has arrived, and
    has it not yet occured........
    That we must all burn so that he may again be served?




    Submitted on 2005-02-28 14:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm, maybe its that I'm partial to the usage of "entrails"...but this piece is fab-u-lous! Spiritual, yet not...I can't quite explain it...but very well written. There's nothing I would change
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Deadly Sauce | [ Reply to This ]


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