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    dots Submission Name: Ticking Awaydots

    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTicking Awaydots

    Life will pass you by if you are not careful,
    The clock speeds ahead without a watchful eye,
    I am old and ever regretful,
    To many wasted opportunities,
    And unappreciated gestures.
    Time stands still when aware,
    But man slacks, un-using potential.
    After time manís eyes open more,
    But when they realize, its too late.
    Life has passed and eternally gone,
    No memories,
    No prosperity,
    No movement.
    The pinnacle gone to waste,
    So be aware and alert.
    Watch the clock and donít cheat life,
    Save your self as I should have,
    Tick, Tick, Tick.

    Submitted on 2005-02-28 16:32:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is defanetly a favorite for me, because i like what its saying, like dont waist your time pouting kinda things. because life will pass you by quicker than you think.
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by _dana_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this! Very descriptive, and as I am a fan of large adjectives, bravo! I'm gonna keep an eye on you and read more of your work
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Deadly Sauce | [ Reply to This ]
      Very discriptive...but I'm a firm believer it's never too late. Keep hope. Great write, I liked it..don't regret what you didn't do just remember to not let things pass you by next time.

    Good luck!
    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]

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