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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots

    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Something I wrote today during American Lit, and I kinda liked it. What do you think?

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    Life is just a meaningless compilation of boring nights with few past glories.
    Live life to the fullest?
    Just tell me how.
    We spend all our time waiting-
    Waiting in line,
    Towing the line,
    Never step out.
    Mindless, meaningless movements just to justify living,
    Follow the leader.
    Until we finally reach the front of the line,
    And by then, we’re dead.

    Submitted on 2005-02-28 19:53:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is great. A bit depressing but truth none the less. Great flow and awesome imagery. Short sweet and to the point but captivating on the way there.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      I have felt like this lately... and it is true. I like that it is short. I've read too manty long poems lately. I love the ending...it's just so...I don't know the word but I really like it. I didn't see any typos and I didn't notice a fixed structure you followed so you couldn't mess up with that. I think you did a pretty good job! nice write! :)
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]

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