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    dots Submission Name: addicted to praisedots
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    Author: wildchild
    ASL Info:    19/f/northwest
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 307/268/27
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1067
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1384



    Description:
       don't ask me where this came from, i really don't know.


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    dotsaddicted to praisedots
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    She was addicted
    to a dangerous drug;
    she could not live without
    passionate praise.

    She loved the attention
    given to those few.
    she held it in her hand
    and never let it go.

    She relished in the spotlight,
    that hot bright gaze.
    she locked on with feverish eyes,
    the only thing she coveted.

    She did it all for
    one thing only, because
    she was addicted,
    addicted to praise.

    She saw years fly by,
    and it all stayed the same.
    she was always on a high,
    riding the wave of compliments.

    She never realized how much
    was left behind
    she sacrificed herself-
    her individuality and personality.

    HE came one dark day
    riding on the same wave,
    he lived for glory
    and rolled in gold.

    He came with daggers
    and cut apart the tapestry.
    he held the rod
    and melt the metal.

    He tore it all away,
    burned it cold.
    he ripped our her heart
    and threw it upon the floor.

    And so the torch was passed.
    various cycles of life.
    Beware into which clans you fall,
    for ultimately... changes come.




    Submitted on 2005-02-28 19:57:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whats up? ya, Thats.............good dont know what else to say. After reading something I liked. I am usally stuck in thought for a while And for some reason Elite wants me to wright an entire comentary just to say I liked some thing?...................... But anyways That was good I liked that!
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by ooononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      Whats up? ya, Thats.............good dont know what else to say. After reading something I liked. I am usally stuck in thought for a while And for some reason Elite wants me to wright an entire comentary just to say I liked some thing?...................... But anyways That was good I liked that!
    | Posted on 2006-04-06 00:00:00 | by ooononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of myself. I know it's weird, but I feel like sometimes, I strive too much for praise and when i don't get recognition, I go all... crazy. Sometimes it gets to my core, and tears me apart. D:

    The second part, where this polar opposite in male form arrives, sort of threw me off for some unknown reason.

    Anywaay, thanks for sharing <3 Yes, you were random-user of day : D
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha well isnít this the lovely write here. so there is this girl who craves attention and she says look at me! I am in the spotlight! Iím on top of the world! me me and more me! she goes on like this wanting more praise wanting all this attention, riding the waves of compliments. well because she deserves it right? well I am sure she must have done something great to deserve all that praise right? right? ha ha I am a nut ok so there is this guy who gets with the gal and launches her into the abyss so to speak puts her in her place. tears out her little pretentious heart because well the tide has turned on her somehow the fates above decide she was much way too much intoÖ. herself. is that the gist of this story? well I must say maybe she got what she deserved and maybe she just didnít know what kind of praise she needed. you see it is the me me part I hate. but there are those people, the ones who need that caring, need that connection. there are circumstances that arise for a person to be that way. maybe it is not praising they are after maybe just to have someone else care without being a paper cardboard cut out of a person. see there is a difference between blind praise and honor. to praise with honor is to hold one in high regard yet many would lump that in with praising. so the question for this write is what kind of praises did she seek just a general praise or to have someone care, honor her. making her believe she is someone of value. knowing the difference between insincere blind praise and real honor is a difficult thing to see. I do have those around me whom I feel do both at times. I do slip and do that too I am not perfect myself, but I am struggling to connect to folks in a real way. the girl depicted in this write does remind me of a friend, what I have found out through many hardships of my own is that she wanted not blind praise but to have someone care. maybe that is what this person in this write wanted just for someone to care for her. isnít that what we all want? very good write here got me thinking,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem. It sounds like lyrics to a song. My song I suppose. I like how every second stanza rhymed better than the rest. Nice flow. great ideas.
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by K | [ Reply to This ]
      Ain't that the truth... Great poem, the only things that I thought didn't quite fit were these 2 lines: "and never let it go.", and "one thing only, because".. the first one because I thought the flow was a little off, and the other line because it's worded a bit strange. Otherwise, ausome poem! If you just make some minor revisions, I'm sure this poem'll be even better!
    :3
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Ajyra | [ Reply to This ]
      very good. I liked that and I can relate very well. Who doesn't like praise? It can be very addicting though. Once in the spotlight, then put into the scenery. I can relate very well. I just don't think that the last stanza fits well. I do however like the way you used the word tapestry. Very good way to describe that scene.
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]
      You suck! Hehe, kidding. A couple speeling do wrongs <-yes do wrongs =p. I think you should write a poem about me Kidding, I don't want to know how horrible you think I am.

    Now, the poem, I like the last stanza the most, so much emotion! I was choked up..it could have been the water that went down the wrong tube..NO it had to be the poem..maybe not. I should stop the madness, but it is so much fun.

    I do actually comment on the poems sometimes, don't I? Eh, whateva, I didn't like this one as much as your others, but that isn't saying much because I LOVE all of your others, so this one I just simply love less. Lol, if that makes sense.
    ~*Adorkable Bonnie*~
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]


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