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    dots Submission Name: "LOVE IN THE AIR"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 655
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 185



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       I had a few nice thoughts today, so viola!


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    dots"LOVE IN THE AIR"dots
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    The clouds sit upon high.
    Waiting for a chance
    to let the sunshine by.
    When it does,
    they share a dance.
    Because love
    was in the air.




    Submitted on 2005-03-01 07:05:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      First impression: really short! I got that it's about two people who fall in love, and that's about all I can get from it. I like the way it's written. The period after the first line and the semicolon after the fourth line don't fit, though; they should be commas.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and simple though real good. I like this one because it's a happy one. useally everyone writes love poems ending in pain or death but this is soothing. good job.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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