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One Last Thing

Author: Dollface
ASL Info:    18-f-AK
Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 15 /18 /7
Words: 154
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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One Last Thing

I lie awake in bed at night
and you're still the only thing on my mind
late into the afternoon nothing seems to pass the time...
You fall in love at a simple glance
for me it takes a while
when I said I was ok, baby I was in denial
Of course they say
there's other fish in the sea
but what they don't tell you is that there is only one, you and me
I tried to tell you exactly how I feel
but i guess you didn't listen or you didn't think I was for real...
Now you've left me broken hearted
a terrible pain I've never felt
this crack will always remain
where you used to make it melt
All I want to say is I still wanna be your friend
even though you may love someone else
I'll still be here for you till the end

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