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Addiction


Author: Dollface
ASL Info:    18-f-AK
Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 15 /18 /7
Words: 105
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Addiction



I get confused...
when it comes to love
I love you, I hate you
It always seems like a violent shove
Maybe that's why they call it falling
because you're never quite on your feet
You're mostly floating or flying
At times love can be a bit discreet
I don't know why it's such a great feeling
An entriguing emotion, a pill
gives you a high then you come crashing to reality
It's like an addiction, if you will
This short-term rush of anxiety
It's really quite a devilish thing
Love gets the heart pumping
but never really stays unless given a ring





Submitted on 2005-03-01 14:59:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was... a tad generic... sorry- i mean- it just was. maybe make the rhyme more complex, and the meter less nursery-rhyme-ish... this has potential, it's just not reached it yet. *md*
| Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]


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