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    dots Submission Name: Here I Amdots
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    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsHere I Amdots
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    Here I am,
    Just waiting-
    Waiting for my dull life to finally commence.
    Send me on a journey-
    Something to occupy me until I die,
    Maybe even add a little perspective to my life.

    Here I am,
    Just waiting-
    Waiting for my life to start.
    Bigger and better things
    Are supposed to be coming,
    But where are they?
    I look to the horizon,
    And I see nothing-
    No success,
    No hopes,
    No dreams.
    Where is my life?

    Here I am,
    Just waiting-
    Kill me now.




    Submitted on 2005-03-01 15:06:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      u r either too lazy or hopelessly bored out of life...
    naturally ur depressed and lack of things that will make u enthu.. is not there.
    There are a few things apart from putting your feeling into poetyr that u can try..
    one such thing making new friends
    observing people around you
    going for a long drive, with little cash and lots of gas in the vehicle. finding a jon somewhere distant, where no one knows u...
    lots of things... u just have to make a move...
    keep moving!

    nice to meet u

    Regards
    Ravi/Umay/Rawpot
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good. i liked it because it told a story and its one of those stories i can relate to which makes it so much better.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was really good. All i would do different is add a little bit more imagery. I think it was very clear, you added so many feelings. I hope your find some happiness in your life...and it gets better. No life is perfect though, so don't wait for a perfect life. Keep up the wonderful work
    *~mikki~*
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmm... I can deffinently relate to this peice... but we keep on living... hoping that some day soon it will get better... am i right? I wrote a poem about the same thing yesterday but i havn't posted it... Keep on writing, and keep on living.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by MasterBrad | [ Reply to This ]
      Here I am just waiting



    kill me now


    So smooth. Youíve been to thys place. Itís nice to visit every once and awhile. But donít move there. A very good write- as the thoughts themselves think and unfold in the brain. Peace, love and cans of lima beans- ~#6-
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]


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