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    dots Submission Name: Live @ 5dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 536
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       I don't even really know where this came from??? Just a Tuesday afternoon quickie!
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    One man came
    to be our
    Victor
    Priests harm children
    inside the
    Rector
    A crown of
    thorns a
    genleman
    Open your eyes
    and close
    the curtain...




    Submitted on 2005-03-01 15:18:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      too many damn curtains were drawn...too much overlooked...i was raised catholic..i was an altar boy..not an abused one luckily...but i feel for those young people...and i despise the cover ups...the moving of priests to different dioceses---the sweeping under the rug...shame on them.

    god, this poem is powerful good...gentle men who are far from gentlemen.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Were you refering to the blindness of the Priests to the sins within the Priesthood when you said "Open your eyes, and close the curtain instead of hearing others sins- look at theirs?
    They represent a false 'victor', such a truthful and profoundly stirring thought and so well done.
    I hope "I" understood you! I feel for those who do not spent time reading until the message speaks to them, at least this was the message that came to my heart. I hope i am right.
    A great piece this needs to be framed and shouted on the mountain tops.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. to me it looks like your saying church leaders arent always the holy ones? hmm. well i dont understand anything so it doesnt matter. "open your eyes and close the curtain.." makes me think. lovely.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]
      "I dont know " poems are cool...I do that sometimes too. Just write what comes to mind. It can make go, "Whoa! Whats that all about???" I like the verse "Open your eyes and close the curtain." REminds me of looking out a window trying to find something and going blind looking for it because if you were able to close the curtain you would find that its already something you have inside. Just a thought...
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know what the hell you are talking about but it sounded good. It flowed nicely. Now if only I understood it...

    Hmmmm... LOL

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    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      Aha, did the priest thing enter into your mind when you wrote this? Actually, this is a fascinating little piece if that's really what you were getting at. Sometimes, I find, when writing we have this total thought in mind, yet when others read it, they install totally different view points. This is what I gleaned from it. Please let me know if I was right.
    Very interesting
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know what this is about, but I have some Ideas.. When I saw you put Victor, oh boy that brought memories into my head. My friend has a huge big crush on a guy named Victor..
    Im sorry I didn't quite get it.. But I would love to hear what it is about..
    It sounds interesting.. But usually the interesting ones get me so confused and puzzeled. Than I draw a blank..
    Sorry
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well i dont quite know what to say.
    i do disagree with the topice but that is ok. in other ways i can actully agree to it.
    i like how simple yet profound it is.
    -snuff
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      You misspelled gentleman it came out as genleman. I don't have really anything to say besides that. Way to speak out on a hot topic. We need more people to write about things that matter instead of how their boyfriend sucks, and school blows. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]


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