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    dots Submission Name: Little Sinnerdots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       this is umm....I dunno really....a guess nightmare of paranoid pagans....I've been called a sinner and damned to hell too many times to care at this point though......enjoy


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    dotsLittle Sinnerdots
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    I am a little sinner
    that is what I am told
    I will burn in hell
    with the rest of the
    Goddess-worshipping-
    polytheistic-tree-huggin'-
    devils
    ~
    "You Sinner, you Wretch
    you Bitch, you Bastard
    I wouldnt want God to
    Spare you!"
    ~
    I am a little devil
    that is what I am told
    I spill poison upon all
    I touch
    I am soulless
    ~
    I have dreams of them tying
    me down and burning pentacles
    and trees down while screaming
    "Kill the Witch!"
    Of being drowned in the bottom
    of a lake
    the same lake they baptize their
    children
    I have visions of all those who
    unjustly died before me
    I...
    I am a sinner....
    that what they tell me




    Submitted on 2005-03-01 17:31:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You right, that is a pagan nightmare! Overall, the imagery is good and the repetition of "I am a sinner" is just enough so that it isn't really..tiring. You could probably revamp this a bit and maybe make it flow a little better...or that might just be how I am reading it.
    cya~
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job. The frantic lines and the way they have a different flow to them shows the kind of scary emotions and panic that I can imagine you felt when you wrote this poem. Good job. Expand a little more on the whole pagan thing. Marion Zimmer Bradleys Forest House, Lady of Avalon and The mists of Avalon really look deep into the Druid lore. That might help you a little.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]


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