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Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 28
Class/Type: Poetry /
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not too sure, it just came out. inspired by the ex ofcourse. and whats the deal people? if its not about sex you cant comment? Fok dat!


third degree burns
blister my soul
cauterizing the hole
stopping the torrential flow
really....a small price to pay
damming the rapids of emotional sway
the burn
i embrace

Submitted on 2004-03-30 16:17:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Now this i like because it speaks directly to me. Pain seems to respond most rapidly to more pain- cauterization the quickest binding. And t sure is a small price to pay.
| Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
  i can feel the rage in this, very very nice. i love a good pissed off full of pain poem that isn't *sigh, i'll say it,,, cliché. you did quite nice with this one.
| Posted on 2004-03-30 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah.... short poetic perfection. You've won the game of, well, whatever the heck we call this game. I think you won a microwave.

~ Niphredil
| Posted on 2004-03-30 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
  Excellent! I really mean that....This is quite good and I do know what I am talking about. LOL~
| Posted on 2004-03-30 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]

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