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    dots Submission Name: Twigsdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 907
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    Bytes: 293



    Description:
       something that came out from my mind now...it's not done with much effort..


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    dotsTwigsdots
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    twigs on the ground
    wasted
    sometimes burned
    left to decay
    on earth's filthy ground
    none tried to look
    or none could ever see
    it is more than what it is
    remnants of things
    that could build a nest
    and give home to a bird




    Submitted on 2005-03-01 22:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This could be a litmus-test for creative
    thinking. Show someone twigs leaves and
    grass on the floor and ask them to carefully
    consider what they see. Then to write a
    poem. If all they can come up with is
    cleaning up the mess then they are not
    such a genius as you! After all if a bird
    saw these same items she would think
    a home for my children is right there it
    only waits for me to be.
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm... this one made me think alot. then my head hurt from all the thinking but ever when it started to hurt yer poem was still interesting. then i finaly decided to stop thinking and comment allready. this one is good and it makes me wonder if twigs is a metafore. the part i liked the bast was this part:

    none tried to look
    or none could ever see
    it is more than what it is
    remnants of things
    that could build a nest
    and give home to a bird

    i no that it's half the poem but there isn't much too go on in the first place any way i like it cause it seems to say that even if something or someone is hopeless theres stilll hope some were
    keep on the keepin' on!
    mheracai
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm... i wish i could say that i understand this peice, but im sure that it was wrote to make you think... it made me think that you can find shelter in even the worst places if you have love... but thats just me...
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by MasterBrad | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it but... like the others said it me think (for about 1 min) and I realized what it ment and I when I did I was like awwwwww.. sorry had to that, If your wonder I have a lot of problems and I show it in some of my poems(feel free to look at them there somewhat good but they need some work) like I go to suicidial thoughts to love to passion and the some crazy [censored](I have like 60! more poems I haven't typed yet) but anyways enough about me I wanna know more about you and your method of poetry so I can in some way help better my own poems and if you want i'll be more the thrilled to help you with something if you like well I come and read some more of your poetry later k c ya. 1 love
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by C. Flava | [ Reply to This ]


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