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    dots Submission Name: Chessboard Talesdots
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    Author: Mady Ramlan
    ASL Info:    19/F/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 9/8/8
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Our life is what we choose, what we ignore, and what we don't know.


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    dotsChessboard Talesdots
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    I love to play chess,
    and get all excited by just looking-
    at the piece on the board.
    An enraptured feeling of choosing paths,
    for my pawns and my rooks,
    and without strategies,
    my pieces move forward,
    but somehow along the way,
    I always lose my knights-
    not my Queen or Bishops,
    and the opposition too lose underlings.

    Funny, it hurts but a lesson-
    I never seem to learn.
    and shomehow, people think-
    all chess players are geniuses,
    until you think you are done.

    The squares of black and white-
    are just roads you have to choose,
    to reach the destination of anywhere.
    Even with calculations,
    we can never say we know which square-
    our piece will land,
    or how many pawns we may lose.

    Oh,
    just remember to guard and to guard-
    your King. Your dignity.




    Submitted on 2005-03-01 22:05:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poem has imagery to me, it paints a chess board in my mind, and it illustrates the passion you have for chess. Me as well, had that passion but through time I came across writing. And if you can develop a passion for chess, I know as well your writing can improve. I like your poem it was something that made me reminisce about my childhood years, as to how people come about things you know. Well keep up the good work and try to take this poem further and spread out, and relate it to life to the inspiration it has brought forth to you and others who might feel the same way. Spread your thoughts and feelings a little more and you'll see how it will turn out to be.

    LK
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]


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