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    dots Submission Name: Don't Know Who You Aredots
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    Author: the apocrypha
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 185/192/48
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Hm...weird stuff, isn't it?


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    dotsDon't Know Who You Aredots
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    I mean to
    I'd love to
    Be like you
    But you know
    You sure as hell would know
    I've never been like that
    Or have I ever meant to be like what?
    A lonely photograph covered in dust
    A compulsive reflex of self-disgust
    A hole in the middle of a chest
    An unchallenged mind, a boring poet

    No, no, you can't know
    You can't empathize this, no
    You won't sympathize
    To someone who's fallen that low

    Because after all, father
    After all it doesn't matter
    How I am and who you are




    Submitted on 2005-03-02 12:07:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is wierd but not in a horrible way. it reminds me of when my brother got into a argument with my father. And your lines:

    A lonely photograph covered in dust
    A compulsive reflex of self-disgust

    I feel the same way sometimes. Good poem, keep up the good work. I look forward to reading some more of your poetry when I get a chance
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Charlenee | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel this same way..but maybe you dont mean these words as I think. This is about your father right? Well I don't know mine either, never have. The difference between you and I, is that you have seen a picture, yet I have no image of my creator.
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Brooke | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this was moving. I don't know I wasn't ready for the last stanza but it fits so well. It was a really good write a clear explanation and a true one at that. It reminds you that you have to be yourself and not what other people want you to be. Good write. Broken DreamsX
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ]
      something told me after you related to my poetry so well that I should check out more of yours and I am glad that I did. I found this gut-retching and full of ...I don't know almost betrail. I have issues with my own father and so this piece hits home pretty hard.
    thanx for the write.
    Rubi
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Rubi_Roja | [ Reply to This ]


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