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    dots Submission Name: Heartbeatsdots

    Author: Anju
    ASL Info:    25/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 24/27/15
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1041
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    My mind runs fast,My words run short
    When flushed with the feelings I have for you.
    Throbs my heart as never before
    When comes to my sight your loving image;
    To my mind comes great felicity
    When thoughts of youRush past me.

    As drops of water Melt into the sand-
    Burning in radiance and cooling thy self,
    You have melted into my self
    And given me new meanings
    To lead on my life....

    Submitted on 2005-03-02 12:42:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A little confused..yet on the same page. The words I liked most in this write were:
    My mind runs fast, My words run short,
    When flushed with feelings, I have for you!
    I can relate very much!
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Brooke | [ Reply to This ]
      This was nice it was a good expression of emotion. I have to agree with Brooke it started off very well and the first two lines were my favourites. It was short and sweet and it is hard to communicate such feelings but in my opinion you did it well. Good write. Broken DreamsX
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree... a little confusing... flow is a bit weird... but I get it... loved the emotion...
    great write keep it up!

    - Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by xSweetestThingx | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the first line:
    my mind runs fasst, my words run short...
    Yeah I know that feeling... It's almost like you don't know what to do with yourself.
    you have melted into my self...
    another good line!
    Great write!
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by musaXX | [ Reply to This ]
      Agreeing with everyone else that the first lines:

    My mind runs fast, My words run short,
    When flushed with feelings, I have for you!

    are the best. Love the imagery and feeling expressed. (I, too, can relate!) But I think that the flow could be improved, put more smoothly.

    Very nice. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Amelit | [ Reply to This ]

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