standing face to face with a parallel Dimension
the tension you feel perpetuated by the eyes dissention
conventional thought whether you like it or not
is the only way out of this sudden plot you earlier sought
you got to just walk as far away as you can
yet you stand facing a Reality as large as the Rio Grande
To Understand fully what it is you're trying to investigate
you must tolerate it as you see it always trying to emulate
as insanity closes in and aggression at a Reflection is on the brink
it reads your mind while you think and you haven't really seen it Blink
above the bathroom sink lies a person looking into you Existence
your resistence is more than defeated by the others persistence
yet the otherside is equally beaten as you didn't disappear
with thinking unclear, you question
are you the Reflection staring back from the Mirror
i had to read this over out loud. it's definitely something i could see hearing at an open mic. i have one question though, why did you choose the words you did to capitalize?
i'd have to agree with kasuni blah blah whatever the [censored] the rest of the sn is. in that i think the ryme didn't work all that well( at least as far as my tastes are ) I think percise ryme makes things sound to much like a catchy coke add or somthin, not in that this does, but yeah. I don't think that the ryme distorts the meaning of the write, just downplays it a little bit in my mind. well later. good write over all, in that it did have a nice natural rythm, which would make it good spoken piece,........... um that's all,
Submission Name: ¿The Reflection?
