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    dots Submission Name: Screaming From Each Cutdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 640



    Description:
       This was inspired by Deadly Sauce...I was writing a comment to her and I felt a poem coming on...this is the result, I am thinking of revising it but I am not a big fan of that, it is like when I paint a picture, I can't stop untill it is finished and I have put emotions into it that should not come out or it would not be art...bah I am rambling. Enough of that...just let me know what you think.


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    dotsScreaming From Each Cutdots
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    This is the first time I have seen my wrist without blood
    underneath the bracelets and longsleeves my arms are finally naked
    the scars
    they remind me
    they tempt me
    they scream to me
    remember the pain
    remember how it calmes you
    with each cut a tear was forced
    and you can't get to that place anymore
    rocking bak and forth
    blood spilling on the floor of the bathtub
    every cut telling a story
    this time they have gone to far
    I am screaming from each cut
    tempted by the pain
    tempted by the scars
    that won't go away




    Submitted on 2005-03-02 14:20:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i liked this peice. you used good description,especially in the 1st and 2nd line. Even though the first two lines are longer than the rest i liked the form, it sounds good. i'm unsure of what is happening in this peice though. at first i thought that she didnt cut herself again (because it talks about remembering and how it was tempting) and then i thought that she did cut herself again(because of these lines "blood spilling on the floor of the bathtub
    every cut telling a story
    this time they have gone to far
    I am screaming from each cut")
    and then in the end i thought that she didnt (becuase it talks about being tempted again and about the scars)...i dunno, it is a little unclear in that part. but i still thought that it was really good.
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]


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