Hmm, Cuddledumplin's comment kind of took me back a step. I felt your love, your passion, your need to protect this thing that holds your heart, to either make it or break it. I actually visualized the spreading of the wings around her, holding her close, keeping her from harm. I thought it was beautiful. I think it was the perfect length, it left enough to be imagined, but not to where we didn't understand. I truly liked this one.
In your first verse I was under the impression your were overly protective of someone, then the second verse made it sound like you commited suicide to become this angel. The picture on your site gives the poem even a more errier overtone as it looks like death killed the angel. All in all I'd say it needs more work on telling that story in more detail
Well, according to all I know about religion, angels never were people, so the best you could hope for would be a friendly ghost. You misspelled banishing too. I don't know. This sounds obsessive and sick. I guess that's what you wanted though. There are a few too many you's too. Perhaps you could rewrite this to avoid that redundancy.
This is so sweet. Yes, it is short, but to the point and the message is quite clear. And the imagery is wonderful. I can just see you protecting your beloved angel. You did a fantastic job with this poem. Keep up the great work.
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