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My life as the rusty old knife


Author: painofthanatos
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Class/Type: Poetry /I hate you
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dedicated to half of the people who will read this. I'm sick of being so ignored. I'm sick of every one being oblivious of my presence until I have a mental break down in history (which was absolutely humiliating) or until something in their life goes wrong and they need a shoulder to cry on...Cry on your own damn shoulder...That's what the rest of us have to do...Cry into our own shoulders something tears with pillows until we fall asleep....


My life as the rusty old knife



I don't want to be lonely no more
But I'm sick of being used
Disregarded and abused
I'm here for you when things go bad
But that's the only time
And it's starting to make me mad
I'm ignored in the good times
Like a rusty old knife
And only put to use
When you're sick of your life
I'm tired of being your shoulder to cry on
I'm sick of being no one important
Someone high up on the shelf
But used more then friggin toliet paper
To keep you feeling good about yourself
I'm through with lying,
I'm through with being nice
I hate you you f***ing bitch
Now get the hell out of my life!!!




Submitted on 2005-03-03 12:13:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i disagree ms fallen_angel3...psh...i thought it was very good...so yea...i liked the metaphor of a rusty old knife...awesome complete awesome and going as one of my favorites!

~ Jessi ~
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by RainbowGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I liked it. it hit home for me.
I'm through with being nice
I hate you you f***ing [censored]
Now get the hell out of my life!

thats how I feel with my mom. I dont know who you are talking about, but I hope you can fix the relationship. Keep writing
~Nichole
| Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by fallenpopcorn10 | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is strong and i can relate. Everything you say seems real and true. the flow is good and the words are srtong. keep writing

~lauren
| Posted on 2005-06-04 00:00:00 | by blahblahgurl | [ Reply to This ]
  Why did you hold back,lol

I hope you got your venting out you needed too.

It's a very powerful tell it like it is poem.

In venting poetry one can't expect poetic profoundness, only sheer and honest angry,which you conveyed powerfully.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW A BIT on the angry side, and a little down, but I'm feeling pretty much the same way right about now. Life's a pain in the ass and it's too tough to comprehend.
| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this one...i can feel the anger and hate to this person with your metaphors...the toilet paper...comparing it to yourself and how this person is using you...i thought it was very good...i like the whole idea of the poem...it made me feel like going to that one person who uses me in my life and tell them to piss off...very good write...
-Hound of Hell
| Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
  Grood evening, and how are we thys fyne day of the week?

I will not ignore you. But don’t cry on my shoulder- then I get salty and have to go on and brush my shoulder off- ya mean figga? Shyte- I can’t be havin’ that! Lolfull! Chin up luv, stiff upper and all that rott.
Love the title of thys. I lick it thusly... “I'm ignored in the good times/Like a rusty old knife/And only put to use/When you're sick of your life” Good stuff- the whole thing. A suggestion though- rage and pain are uncensored. Don’t censor the word ‘fu<king’- okay? Screw uptight ppl who don’t lyke it- thys is too uptight ppl- isn’t it? The types who do ignore. The better thans... You only want the one curse word though- makes it more powerful- but “friggin’” takes away from it- rework that lyne to something of the effect- “But you use me more like toilet paper” and then put in that f-bomb, grrrl!

Peace, love and uncanny burritos with plans of universal domination... ~Six~
| Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  OUCH! Nicely written :D i love it because it reminds me of a few of my friend that treat me like that :D but seriously, I totaly disagree with Fallen_angel3 becuase this is an awesome write and its your own way of expressing it so she can't tell you it sucked, but the way it's written it really great! I love the imagry in it and the used more than friggin toilet paper is great , i love it :D
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by lilghostyme | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, wow, wow. So much emotion in such a not so long poem. This is execellent, and I really like the metophor of the rusty knife.
It's so true how ppl use only when they need to. I'm sorry that ppl treat you like [censored], and they should all rought in limbo!
Anyway, wonderuous write.

Rain
| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  why does it seem that we always feel the same damn thing at the same time... it's scare at times... I like this it actually made me mad and cry and I'm in the damn library crying and yelling people are going to think I have some damn mental problem... I liked it and I'm sorry you feel like this...
| Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]


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