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    dots Submission Name: Sarah Bellerdots
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    Author: Lil_Santo
    ASL Info:    19=I
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34/52/15
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 411
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 970



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    dotsSarah Bellerdots
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    Sarah Beller
    just the right medicine for an Angelic Feller
    My wings shake with anticipation
    peering within your mind without your cooperation
    though I'm no stalker or anything like that
    I'm just a whisper in wind wearing a Raiders cap.
    whether I blow you off your feet, or just move your hair
    with every wind that goes by know I'm there
    like a spectre ready to rip your head in two
    don't turn around because I'm behind you
    I'm Insanely in love with that picture you got
    fighting internally with my own reservations alot
    to be a shadow thrown up on your ceiling
    I'd decend upon you to let you know what I'm feeling
    the burning withing, the total anger and desire
    My eyes are like furnaces a lit with fire
    I'd wrap my two hands around your neck with love
    until you're an angel like me.....flying above..




    Submitted on 2005-03-03 15:51:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OMG this is about me !!!!....
    Yeah ...So whatever ...
    This is awesome ...Taking someone to the other side because you love them ...Thats romantic homocide ...I love it !!...
    I guess i don't scare easily ...(or they do) ...I just thought this whole thing was sweet....It's the kind of of thing id want on a valentines day card...
    Im going to contest Browns on this one ...

    "though I'm no stalker or anything like that
    I'm just a whisper in wind wearing a Raiders cap"
    Was definatly my fave part ...
    I just saw that being a symbol of someone who never leaves you ..the kinda of emotion that doesnt die (how sooky and soppy do i sound?) And the raiders cap was just a way to make him seem more real i think ..
    Anyway ..Like i said "Whatever" this is awesome ...Im adding it to my faves
    Much love and Blessed Be

    P.S ..Stop stalking the underagers ...They get so bloody cranky !
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm looks as though someone feels you crossed the line here...

    in anycase this was an overall good write.

    I have to admit this line "though I'm no stalker or anything like that
    I'm just a whisper in wind wearing a Raiders cap"

    gave me that whole ohhhhh*shivers* feeling..but not really in a bad way.
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Wth? You're so freakin' strange man. You DO know I'm 16 right?? You need to get your priorities in check if you think you want some teenage girl you've never met, and never really talked to. All I can say, is that 19+16=illegal. Lay off.
    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by Deadly Sauce | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey THIS POEM ISN'T ABOUT YOU ...BUT IF was...I'd be the first to let you know...besides...I'm not going to meet you, that comes way later...I'm just poking around. looking at that nice brain of yours...and besides if you flip the 9 upside down you get a 6...or you could just switch the 1 and the 6 and then you'd be the one treated like a perpetrator...thanks ya silly broad.
    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by Lil_Santo | [ Reply to This ]


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