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Submission Name: Let it flow dots

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Author:	elephantasia
ASL Info:	37/F/UK
Elite Ratio:	3.54 - 398/490/160
Words:	110

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	708
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	687

Description:
Written in two minutes, i just wanted to let flow out what was trickling within lol, just for fun

Let it flow dots

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No idea what to write,
so out it comes black on white
i'll write whatever'sin my heart
And put on paper what my soul departs.

What have you got to say today
Will you decide to come out and play
A poem, a song, a little ditty,
What would you like to share, my pretty?

A word here, a sentence there
And suddenly a poem is there
Rhyming words, couplets coupled
I open up and out they bubbled.

Well thank you soul for sharing this
It wasnt the deep heart spoken kiss
But nevertheless I have to say
I like what you shared anyway.

Submitted on 2005-03-04 02:24:54 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I dont really like this.. no offence. i just don't like the language used and how the stanza's dont seem to relate or flow into one another, nevertheless...some of your other work is commendable, keep trying.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah. I like this. Sometimes it's hard to figure out what to write... (actually, right now it's hard for me. writer's block of some sort). You're just letting your head take over with the poem, trying not to make it mean anything deep. Keeping it simple. I should try doing that more often... y'know this also reminds me of something interesting...
But all in all.
This has a nice, consistant, catchy rhyme pattern.
And if you don't mind, I'm gonna look at your other poems as well... ,-, *snoops*
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a great idea, or was it written as it tells...nice thoughts about what we all feel, Pen in hand, waiting for something to happen!
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  My eyes hurt because reading this poem! I didn't like any stanza because it was like all rushed thats what I felt. I personally don't like it but maybe others will! I am interested in reading more of your poems in the near future, there's a poem for everyone and this one wasn't mine so let me know if you write one again I'll read it don't take this as an insult I just didn't feel the poem! Peace & stay safe...
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice - very nice. I think all writers are a little stumped every once in a while. Sometimes just rambling really helps you to think of something worthy of writing about. Keep up the good work.
XOXO - Omni
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by omnipotent | [ Reply to This ]

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