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A Poetic Picture

Author: Brownsdelight
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This is a muse that came from the phrase "the colors of my life."

A Poetic Picture


Is the passion that is contained within my heart


Colors the agony when we are apart.


Is the small girl who still hides within


Gives me hope that I can start all over again.


Is the part of me that just wants to be seen.


Reminds me that no matter what, there is always an in between.


Is the special friendship I have with my little girl.


A reminder that there is still good in this world.


Is the shade of my son’s hopeful eyes.


For remembrance of those who have died.

Applied to a canvas,

An artist’s imagination takes flight.

The picture painted is me

These are the colors of my life.

Submitted on 2005-03-04 11:57:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I wasn't done commenting on this one. Very creative. I don't think I would have thought of making a poem in this fashion which is great I might add. The whole colors thing set it off.
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by SmoothePapa | [ Reply to This ]
  Now this is really beautiful in a simplistic sort of way. I love the many colors and what they mean to you. Very imaginative. That last part just wraps it up so wonderfully I think. An enjoyable read.

Have a beautiful day!

Take Care!
| Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  oh wow. it's simple, but amazing. I don't know what I would do if I couldn't see colors. My favorite line was

Is the small girl who still hides within"

it's so sweet. thanks for a poem that brought a smile to my face. :)
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by Kalidoscopeeyes | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the form you chose to express this- like an amazing menu of colors- pick one, any one...try it on, taste it, savor it...remember it. I am a big fan of color therapy- I use it on my elderly clients and my sweet one with Down Syndrome. Color is precious to me. It is also nice for me to read the work of a fellow mother. Sometimes I feel so matronly about my own work, there being so many young, "hip" writers on this site. I am sure they will appreciate your work for them as they grow and look back on it when they are adults. I really enjoyed this. Magnolia
| Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
  Woo Hoo! You colorful thang you! Dang, that was sweet though! Unique and sweet.

How can you simply open a bag of skittles and go at it like that? Dang, they must have tasted good to give you a muse! lol


Girl, fa real though. That was tight. I really liked it.


| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow it was like i went through the rainbow of emotions i really liked it how the flow of the poem tied everything together. i could really relate to the explanation of your poems because im really into colors each and everyone holds an emotion and a picture in my mind. I could just picture you picking colors and a picture or memory showing how you felt and what the color means to you my fav line would have to be

Reminds me that no matter what, there is always an in between.

i just really liked it and its soo true. the best thing though was that your poem makes sensen its not just nonsense
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  beautiful... this is something that you should have published where thousands can read it.. it is simple and unique.. over all i give it two thumbs up... i say you put some of yourself into that and it truely shows... being pregnant, the part about your children touched me the most...
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Dollface | [ Reply to This ]
  very simple and heartfelt. i had a bit of trouble with the form you chose to use, but that's your prerogative. nice colors...
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  Very, very nicely done. The colors picked go excellently with the descriptions. This cleaver idea comes through straightforward. No hidden meanings to spend hours on figuring out. This makes for an enjoyable read, that all can relax with.
Good job. I'm proud of ya.
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Picture perfect ;)

Absolutely beautiful and full of wonder images and the real reflection of the peice.
Like this


Reminds me that no matter what, there is always an in between.

The simple truth of the shaded place between the black and white...pefect.

Fav and a five girl...this is beautiful..yeah the five came from me but to quote DanielB...the five was all You ;)

| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
  Tina! This was beautiful.

Colors the agony when we are apart."

Know the feeling... Anyway, I like the simplicity of this, and the whole thing just flowed beautifully. Straight forward. Keep it up girl.
| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  What a Wonderful Poem. So clever and sweet, I hope you shared this with your children, I know they must be so very proud of you.
I only wish I could write something this clever. It is so grrrreat to read a piece that isn't depressing. This was fresh and happy and light.
thank you for this. I will have a positive outlook due to this great and poetic write.
| Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by RJCHANDLER | [ Reply to This ]
  You damn crayola box! That was amazingly beautiful girl!

"I so pwoud of you gal"

I loved that title.

Li Li is so crazy talking about skittles and stuff. You combined a unique concept with excellent writing skills.

One of your best...

| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]

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