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    dots Submission Name: Night Flowerdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 706
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Night time walk checking out the flowers that still bloom at night by the pond.

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!

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    dotsNight Flowerdots

    What does night
    mean "2"
    The Daffodil
    It grows dark
    see "1"
    synthesized in
    What does day
    mean "4"
    the Daffodil
    it grows light
    see "1"
    synthesized from darkness... ; > }

    Submitted on 2005-03-04 17:07:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure that I understand what you intended when you use the numbers. But even if you read the poem without the numbers, it still has a lot of meaning. I found the flow to be slightly off when I read, but that might be clearer if you clarify what your intention is with the numbers.

    And yes, stopping to smell the flowers, and to enjoy the blooms is a wonderful thing. I find that it can be extrememly soothing.
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by zyllion | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting technique with the "#" it makes "U" think a little more about what the poem is saying. It does make it kind of confusing though, I'm not really sure which line you intended the numbers to go with for it to make sense...It's really neat, but it seems almost to scientific, "synthesized", to just be "a night time walk checking out the flowers..."
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by MyrddinDerwydd | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly...I kinda like it...reminds me of this girl that use to go to excite webcrawler... Beatchik
    the use of numbers is some thing she did.

    Took me a couple reads...but it grew on me ;)

    Thanks for the fresh scent write
    | Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      The way you made it out was cool. Day and night have no meaning to the daffodil...it will still grow and flourish throughout darkness and light because it is "synthesized" (great word) to both...unless "somebody" picks it out of the ground...hee-hee. Wonderful job my friend.
    | Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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