Description: I rarely write love poems, but for some reason this one has really stuck out for me as an emotional one (at least for one of my love poems). Still, feedback would be greatly appreciated.
A Rose in Bloom -------------------------------------------
Long stemmed and gorgeous
Full bloomed and lovely
How I wish I were able to say
Thank you
Each petal is perfect
Even if it were carved in stone Like your heart
I would still try to send my thanks
You picked it up from your garden
Only this morning
With dewdrops shining on each petal Like tears on my cheeks
Red, red buds
So soft to touch
And so easy to break Like my heart
I love too easily
I trust too easily
But still I want to try to say
Thank you
When I believed the whispered words
Caressing my cheeks
My heart
And my soul
Truly I want to believe you
Accept what you’ve said
As easily as I can accept
Fresh blooms
But every word is too difficult
Making it impossible to believe
Impossible to even mouth the words
Thank you
Searching the garden for weeds
For a daisy to pluck
He loves me
He loves me not
But there are none
Not in your perfect garden
Filled with fresh scents
And flowers e’er in bloom
I cant fault this at all. it is artful and lovely. i agree with everything here about this rose and the concepts within. if i should list my favorite parts, id have to copy and paste the entire work. you are two for two within a 24 hour period. help! someone is taking over my favs list!
I love this poem, especially the italics, it made it seem as though someone else was saying it...but I agree with Haecceity, it was just a bit to long...if anyone on this page should be saying thankyou, it should be the reader of this poem, it was beautiful. Thank You!
Welcome to Elite! This was a nice piece and I just read your comment on my flower poem Night Flower. I appreciate how you compare the love of heart to the heart of the flower and bloom. My favorite stanza was, "You picked it up from your garden Only this morning With dewdrops shining on each petal Like tears on my cheeks" that was just a nice thought and analogy. Love, Peace, Joy and Happy Friday!
Submission Name: A Rose in Bloom
