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    dots Submission Name: Searchingdots

    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       just some random thought that i had put together at school. tell me what ya think.

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    So long, it has been, since I have heard those three words.
    I love you, in sequence as lovers would say.
    Though love can be misquided as lust or an extended friendship, we still continue to take the phrase for granted.
    Many times I have wondered if there is such a thing.
    But then, my heart gets the best of me and forces me to continue on searching.
    To be alone forever.
    What does that mean?
    DOes it mean that one will spend eternity outside, cast into the shadows of doom?
    Is that humanly possible?
    No one is ever "alone".
    Maybe, in the sense of the word, captivated by emotions.
    Locked in your mind, alone.
    For so long, I have yearned to hear those three words, and my search has ended with you.

    Submitted on 2005-03-04 20:56:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow again i need to sop judging a book by it's cover. i did not think i would like this but low and behold i do. and yes those qustions are the same qustions i have asked my self i fear being alone it kinda gives one time to think on the things in life that go wrong or atleast it does me. any how i do like this though just one tiny thing i like the end but it seems as if there is more and if there is by all means add it it kinda just drops you ther yes it has ended with that person but in therory some thing new has just begun. or did you mean it like that for the poem to end just as quickly as that serch you had for love? i don't know i do know i like it and i hope you write more to it normally i dont' tell people to add to thire poetry i figure it is alwasy perfect just the way it is just the way you wanted it but for this i consider it something more becasue i think of it even more personally to my self to critique it then i do others. i don't know i am rambeling. good job *nods head smiles and backs away slowly* sorry lol
    love and light
    | Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by Archer | [ Reply to This ]
      Hell ya! you know i feel this one. good good jog ofcorse. love em all, you know it. keep it up. keep shineing like you do.
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, I feel so special now, I'm glad I could end your journey: ) Sike naw, but this poem is alot better than the previous one I read by you, it had a meanning even though I doubt that this serous of a poem just sprung into your head all out of the blue. Maybe you were looking at a boy you like and the thought came to your head. Anyway, regardless of how the inspiration to write the poem came about it gave birth to a very real poem. The thoughts you adress in this "piece" are extremely true and I can't help but feel your point of view.

    Great job sis.
    Ghost Child
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by Ghost Child | [ Reply to This ]

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