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    dots Submission Name: ~ Mind Over Matter ~dots
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    Author: broken_dreamer
    ASL Info:    16/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 189/172/65
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i was just thinking .... and of course it turned into words. funny how that happens huh?


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    dots~ Mind Over Matter ~dots
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    what will hurt the most?
    saying something and wishing i hadnt?
    or saying nothing and wishing i had?

    i guess the most important things,
    are the hardest things to say.

    should i be afraid to tell him i love him?
    if i do, he might break my heart,
    but if i dont, i might break his.

    should i hide my feelings?
    i dont want to lose what we have,
    but what if we could have so much more?

    i want to love him with all i have,
    but hes too afraid to let me.

    should i deny my feelings?
    i know he doesnt care for me,
    the way i care for him.
    its possible he may not even care for me at all.

    why am i afraid of caring too much?

    ive got to take a chance,
    put mind over matter.
    ive got to find the courage,
    to close my eyes and jump in the dark,
    knowing that i may fall flat on my face,
    and have to get up smiling.

    ill probably have to do it again tomorrow.




    Submitted on 2005-03-04 21:05:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      okay first i want to get the bugger out of the way. there are some spelling errors. MINOR tiny errors though. So i just think that you should review your writings before you submit them and make any changes that you might want or need to make.
    Second. i want to say that i can really feel up to what you had to say. i liked the way you said it. i think there are too many questions and some left unanswered. do you get what i mean when i say that?
    I think there is a good flow in it and i think that you did a very nice job on it. I mean feelings and emotions are only protrayed to others the way that YOU the writer sees them. So it may be hard to come across someone that really does undersatdn what you are saying and can really connect with the words. I recently have had to go through that drama myself. Not fun huh? But just some advice. It is better to live life free than to live in fear. right? Let me explain. For instance. You like this guy. But you guys are friends. Well, I personally would try to talk to him and tell him how i feel. NOt throw my self at him but just let him know the feelings that i am having and try to see whether or not he has the same. And if he doesnt you cant really get mad. Because its not his fault that he doesnt have feelings for you. But if he does. I mean isnt that all for the better? You could maybe get to expierence something that you never thought that you would be able to. Just take a chance and live life on the edge! Sorrie. Kind of went on a whole counselor thing there. Welp. Complements on your writing. Thanks for posting it.
    Stay safe and peaceful

    -Sierra
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by PookiezBookie | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I can definitely relate to this. I always feel like i shouldn't say anything then i feel horrible and am like' damn i should've spoken up'. Great piece!
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]


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