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    dots Submission Name: ~ Willow ~dots
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    Author: broken_dreamer
    ASL Info:    16/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 189/172/65
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 815
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    Bytes: 382



    Description:
       i wrote this after one of my boyfriend broke up with me... not like 5 minutes after... a few days... he was acting like i didnt exist, which he stills does. owell.. tell me what you think.


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    dots~ Willow ~dots
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    i am a willow,
    i always weep when i think,
    that you used to be so sweet.

    i am a willow,
    i always bend whipped by my branches,
    in your wind.

    i am a willow,
    i am doomed to dance,
    to a sad serenade of broken romance.

    i am a williow,
    and though i grow,
    im forever dying in your shadow.




    Submitted on 2005-03-04 21:17:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey, i liked this poem. i could invision a weeping willow tree swaying in the wind.. i like the images that you have created for the reader. nice work.
    ~Caroline~
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Caroline_19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes your weeping willow image was well documented and provided a stunning image for those of us with imaginations. Good vivid words were used.
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by AFireInside01 | [ Reply to This ]


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