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    dots Submission Name: Ouroborosdots
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    Author: MyrddinDerwydd
    Elite Ratio:    5.68 - 7/6/2
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       NOTE: Ouroborous, the title, which literally means "devouring its tail", is a mythological serpent that encircles the globe eternally consuming or biting it's own tail. It is often concidered representative of the cyclical nature of the universe. See http://www.dragon.org/chris/ouroboros.html or http://abacus.best.vwh.net/oro/ouroboros2.html for some more information.


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    water is Life
    mothers’ wombs are liquid havens
    giving birth in a world of their own
    like the oceans teeming with life
    from the white caps of the waves
    to the most unfathomable abyss
    yet danger lurks always near
    for Neptune rules not the seas
    a watery monarch reigns over all
    from the casual toss of the waves
    to the colossal pressures of the deep
    Death walks closely with the unwary
    gnashing teeth and spinning whirls
    are oft the door to the final frontier-
    an eternal liquid night
    water is Death




    Submitted on 2005-03-04 23:29:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is beautiful. It's like water is everything beautiful, and everything terrible, everything good, and everything bad, an ally, and an enemy. Beautiful. The images were vivid, the wording wonderful. Overall a spectacular piece!
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      i cannot say i understood it all, but the sheer beauty of the combinations and depth of the words were so incredibly captivating. an amazing write. i couldn't find anything wrong with it other than how it got a little confusing. great work~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      It started and ended in a very clear manner. The opposite of what watter is really finished off the poem in a correct manner. The imagery was set very well, but you should get more into, write more lines about what water is. This is my first comment so I hope you ejoyed it :)
    | Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by MuckyMuckpoop | [ Reply to This ]


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