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    dots Submission Name: Paybackdots
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    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 998
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 289



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       It's not my best I decided to submit it so people who liked my Payback #2 can see the first Payback


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    I lay and wonder every night
    About why we had that stupid fight
    Why'd I have to call you a slut
    And why I had to slap you up
    But thats what you get you cheating slut
    Now your ass is laying dead
    In the trunk of my Cadillac truck with no head.




    Submitted on 2005-03-05 01:49:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well...uuummmmm...not really feelin this one boy! In the trunk? LMFAO

    Well, I guess that if she deserved it in your terms...then sure. But you won't find me in the back seat of the caddi with your mama and cousins! LMFAO

    Dark and deep and very...WOW!

    LOL

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Flava ;0)

    Do I feel some anger in this poem or ;0) Just kidding ;0) If I was a slut I would be affraid at the moment, because you have painted it well with angry energy and I think person who recieve this poem certainly understand it ;0)

    Keep writing ;0)

    KNS
    | Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by KNS | [ Reply to This ]


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