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    dots Submission Name: Chapter 2dots
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    Author: shivaree
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/SD
    Elite Ratio:    7.93 - 27/17/11
    Words: 435
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
       This is only the second part of my short story, "Mr. Linden's Library" I originally posted it in one large block but it was suggested to me that I submit it in chapters so people wouldn't feel boghed down having to read it all in one setting. I would appreciate any feedback you could give me. Thankyou!


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    DISCOVERY
    CHAPTER 2


    As life can go by faster than blinking, and the time it takes to accurately describe all of the scenic wonders around us is scarcely found, imagine, without my narrative, weeks of passing where trust between tutor and pupil grow. Secrets shared and stories told until Myu's inquisitive mind led her to a pivotal point of no return.

    Myu's heart was pounding so hard she wondered her father did not come into her room to be quiet – that the others in the house were trying to rest. Her flesh felt as though it was being touched by hundreds of spiders. To her, it was a elephantine mystery how there could be any crime – if this was how perpetrators felt every time they were about to act. Myu was crouched on her bed, the cover thrown over her as a privacy tent, and a flashlight in one hand she opened the book on her lap. Myu figured the best time for this would be at night when the others were asleep. She took a breath and read: Chapter One....

    Time went by and Myu continued her tutoring lessons with Mr. Linden – and her grades gradually improved. More importantly to Myu though, was the lessons she was learning about the time before The Nation. “Do you have any other books ... solely for decorative purposes,” a smile came to Myu's face, “from before The Nation?” she asked eagerly of Mr. Linden.

    Mr. Linden frowned and looked up from the science book, in the green leather binding of The Nation's school books. “All the other books I had were taken from me and my family during The War.” he said regretfully. Myu nodded with understanding. “Recycling the paper for official documents aided our Nation in the War,” she said, feeling more respect for Mr Linden.

    However, he didn't seem proud. He seemed, well, not truly angry, but somewhere between that and sadness. “If I were a traitor I would tell you that not everything you are taught is true. I was a boy during The War, and I remember, if I was a traitor I would tell you that the books were burned, along with music, art, buildings, because they contradicted The Nation's belief. I managed to keep that one book due to decorative purposes only .. well that is what you have been told and what anyone else that would come here would be told. No one else knows – that is, if I were a traitor that is what I'd say” he said morosely.




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