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Cries Herself To Sleep

Author: juss_kriss
ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404 /445 /126
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This is about a girl I know, and what happened to her one day.

Cries Herself To Sleep

angry words
slammed doors
opening again
then slammed shut
grabbed by the wrist
then by the shirt
dragged then dropped
screaming for help
a mother comes
pushes him off
yells at him
pushes him away
getting pushed
pushing back
a crying girl
sitting on the floor
scared to death
watching two people
being pushed around
pushed him away
pushing him back
into the kitchen drawer
he opens the drawer
grabs a knife
and holds it to her
tells her to back off
or he swears to god
he will stab her
the girl thinks of the phone
but is too scared
too scared to move
her mother comes
holds her
crys along with her
the girl goes to her room
and cries
cries herself to sleep

Submitted on 2005-03-05 20:02:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is really a sorrowful poem. i wish we could keep all this...stuff from happening, but we can`t. this was heartfelt and meaningful; the definition of a true poem. i am sorry this happens, and i hope you keep safe.
| Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
  awww. . . . its so sad. Its terrible that stuff like that happens. Contrairy to the sad contence its a great poem and sometimes the sadness adds to it. Your a great writer. And I hope that your friend gets help, it sounds like her and her mother are in danger. Good job.
| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
  nicely written and an excellent way to vent. sorry for something like this to happen and it's a real shame there's trash out there that does this crap to people.
| Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]

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