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    dots Submission Name: Cries Herself To Sleepdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This is about a girl I know, and what happened to her one day.


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    dotsCries Herself To Sleepdots
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    angry words
    slammed doors
    opening again
    then slammed shut
    grabbed by the wrist
    then by the shirt
    dragged then dropped
    screaming for help
    a mother comes
    pushes him off
    yells at him
    pushes him away
    getting pushed
    pushing back
    a crying girl
    sitting on the floor
    watching
    listening
    scared to death
    watching two people
    being pushed around
    pushed him away
    pushing him back
    into the kitchen drawer
    he opens the drawer
    grabs a knife
    and holds it to her
    tells her to back off
    or he swears to god
    he will stab her
    the girl thinks of the phone
    but is too scared
    too scared to move
    her mother comes
    holds her
    crys along with her
    the girl goes to her room
    and cries
    cries herself to sleep




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      this is really a sorrowful poem. i wish we could keep all this...stuff from happening, but we can`t. this was heartfelt and meaningful; the definition of a true poem. i am sorry this happens, and i hope you keep safe.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      awww. . . . its so sad. Its terrible that stuff like that happens. Contrairy to the sad contence its a great poem and sometimes the sadness adds to it. Your a great writer. And I hope that your friend gets help, it sounds like her and her mother are in danger. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely written and an excellent way to vent. sorry for something like this to happen and it's a real shame there's trash out there that does this crap to people.
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]


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