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    dots Submission Name: Sludgedots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       My experience of being truly healed from the pain of past events


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    dotsSludgedots
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    I trudged into the darkness once again
    But I wasn't scared this time
    The aim of this journey wasn't to bleed
    The aim of this journey to was to meet the need.

    It was dark in the sludge as I trudged once again
    But this time i didnt go under
    I learned to be light in the darkness of pain
    I learned to be light in the darkness of day.

    I danced as I trudged in the sludge once again,
    Weaving the magic of love
    The power of love can turn sludge to rain
    The power of love can wash away pain

    After trudging through the sludge this time
    I found the real sun shining
    And the tears have washed away the past
    And the need for tears has finally passed.




    Submitted on 2005-03-06 02:05:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was alright...a wee odd but alright...i say odd because the choice of descriptors plays different roles in different peoples imaginations but I do believe I rather enjoyed reading this...
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was quite good. may need some tweaking here and there but overall it's light and deep at the same time. kind of like the realization that we can handle whatever comes our way. the pain passes, the strength takes over. I like this poem. It sheds a light on moving forward away from pain. nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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