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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Threaddots
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    Author: Deadly Sauce
    ASL Info:    18--lady--NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 59/77/31
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 419
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1006



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       I dunno what this is...I don't plan on editing it though. I just want an overall feeling of what people think.


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    A craving…a desire so strong, to just let the chaos I feel around me swallow me whole. Gulped down with a swig of reality. My flesh being consumed by it’s own being. Such a random feeling, yet so familiar I’ve begun to find comfort in it.

    Walking in the brisk winter air, my warm tears forming against the icy wind. Shielding my eyes instinctively like I shield my emotions. I can’t seem to help it any more than my eyes can. That shield protects me, but it’s not impermeable. It’s a one-way mirror…I can see out but others can’t seem to see in. Drained, I shuffle along and retreat to my room.

    The spool of thread dropped, it rolls faster as I catch the end and try to pull it back. Unraveling closer and closer to the edge of the table, about to spill over the edge…where there’s no way of getting it back. My eyes are clouded. I can’t see how far away that edge is, nor how far the spool will fall. I can barely keep track of the spool as it turns out of control.




    Submitted on 2005-03-06 15:24:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm, looks alot like a diary-type of poem to me. Like something you'd write on a piece of paper only for you to read and to keep a record of your own emotions.
    I find that the dominating emotion is confusion rather than depression or melancholy because there are alot of references to motion and movement.
    | Posted on 2005-03-09 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem very much. Although it did not seem like a poem I know I t was. A great friend once told me that a poem can be anything you want it to be. Just make it real. And you have made this poem real. Good Job! keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]



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