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    dots Submission Name: The Choicedots
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    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just a question I was considering put into pretty formatting. Enjoy.


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    dotsThe Choicedots
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    Those who lie in the
    Garden of Eden
    are forever
    trapped by the illusion of itís
    Beauty.

    Those who lie in the
    Garden of Life
    are forever
    trapped within itís
    Pain.

    To be Deceived,
    or
    To be in Sorrow.

    How would we choose?




    Submitted on 2005-03-06 16:25:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I live in the garden of fantasy, so I don't have to choose, but this is an interesting question. seems sorrow is everywhere, but if one does not know sorrow, one cannot know happiness and vice versa. philosophical puzzles give me a headache, so I will just say, this is a very thought-provoking and well written piece of poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece of work here Quin. It brings to mind a lot of quotes: &#8216;ignorance is bliss,&#8217; &#8216;the unexamined life is not worth living,&#8217; &#8216;why, oh why didn&#8217;t I take the blue pill,&#8217; etc. Which puts your work in pretty good company. I&#8217;ve thought about this same subject before, at least in a spiritual sense.

    I can&#8217;t think of any changes to the form of the poem that would improve it, but the question may be different if put in a larger perspective. It makes me think about Adam eating the forbidden fruit (from the tree of knowledge, no less); which makes it seem that the decision has already been made for us. Anyway, enough of my babbling. This is a good poem, which makes one think; and, in the end, isn't that the point of art?

    -DD

    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]


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