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    dots Submission Name: Defining Lonelinessdots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDefining Lonelinessdots
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    Loneliness is...

    1) Blue skies and sunny days
    when I'm broken inside.

    2) Seeing a happy family
    I know I'll never have.

    3) Being with my closest friends
    who don't know the real me.

    4) Thrilling night and haunting moon
    with no one by my side.

    5) Dancing on the beach under stars
    to silent music of eternal solitude.

    6) Listening to a beautiful song
    and no one to share it with.

    7) Watching you smile
    because of someone else.

    8) Knowing that you love me
    but only as a friend.

    ...the basis upon which madness forms...




    Submitted on 2005-03-06 19:06:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very interesting and thought provoking. i know i can relate when i think about every lovely discription of loneliness. and then i love the way you ending it with this line.

    ...the basis upon which madness forms...

    nice!. take care and great write =p
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this is very sad, but all the points are true. I like this a lot, and I know we can all relate to this. Number 8 sure is a slap in the face, isn't it? I know how that is. I hate that you feel this way. Dancing around my room like a complete doofus to the Ramones usually helps me.
    | Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. Its really a lot different than a lot of people write. You have a flow that makes it all work. Your sadness just seems to come across. I really liked how you set it up as a list, but it didn't really sound like it. You really have a lot of talent. I hope you keep up the good work.
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutley agree with this...and I love it! You got all the things that are just so..agonizing..and I think those are things that can make someone go mad!)

    Dancing on the beach under stars
    to silent music of eternal solitude

    I love that...I can mostly relate to 1, 3, 4, 6, 7, 8...I think this is awesome. I am deffinatly going to add it to my favs!
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it...it realli does define the sense of loneliness...i agree with everything you wrote...i've never been able to define it myself...
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so very sad, and REAL at the exact same time. I have felt these exact emotions SO many times it was as if i was reading my own thoughts on lonliness. beautiful expression of true feelings.
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]


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