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    dots Submission Name: Wish Masterdots
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    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    Description:
       About the pain of having your heart in the hands of someone else when you just dont know if you have their heart- or someone else does.


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    dotsWish Masterdots
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    When did you become my stars?
    Iím lying on my back in this field of daisies,
    Feeling nothing but my heartbeatÖ

    [And this aching I have for you].

    Iím whispering my dreams to a sky painted black
    By clouds bringing a summer rain that hopes to wash my faith awayÖ
    The faith that wonít allow me to accept this truth that haunts these dreams of mine-

    [The bitter truth that my whole world is in your hands].

    And Iím imprisoned by this wish that I make every night-
    The one that if granted will mean that youíll live for me.
    And Iím so scared to hear the answer to the question that makes me bleed insideÖ
    Iím so afraid for you to tell me what itís gonna be

    [Is it me or her?]




    Submitted on 2005-03-06 21:30:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, an interesting slant on love. I really liked the images you painted here, and I liked the thoughts in parethesis, too.

    An incredible thought, that the one question you really need answered you're afraid to hear...in case it's the wrong one.

    Very enjoyable

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good piece and I will just say that when love is right you won't have to asj that question because there will be no doubt in your mind. as long as there is doubt, you can bet something is not right. Now this is only my opinion,but, I seen this kinda thing happen a lot in my lifetime and I think I am right.
    One of the great things about writing,to me, is sometimes it helps to get these fellings out and writing is a good way of expressing yourself as you have done here. Good job,
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-06-29 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]


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