What You Do To ME

Author: RJCHANDLER ASL Info:    30/F*GA Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 44 /68 /23 Words: 57

Class/Type: Poetry /Passion Total Views: 1138 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 544

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What You Do To ME

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Skin is aching Craving your touch Anticipating IT won’t take much Giving into Your Advance Contemplating A lovers Dance Our raw desires Once forsaken Manipulating Opportunities taken Two become one As bodies collide Orchestrating A fantasy ride Sinful Passions Uninhibited High Hallucinating Touching my thigh Climactic Explosion In harmony Intoxicating What you do to me.

Submitted on 2005-03-06 22:02:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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u do like this though i almost didn't you really don't get the same flow as you normally do when writing of such things as passion but well i guess it just depends the exact situation. with this poem it works not easily but it works i do like it as well as it's basic theme. good work and i hope to be able to read more of your stuff soon ;). love and light Archer

| Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Archer | [ Reply to This ]

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