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What You Do To ME


Author: RJCHANDLER
ASL Info:    30/F*GA
Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 44 /68 /23
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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What You Do To ME



Skin is aching
Craving your touch
Anticipating
IT won’t take much
Giving into
Your Advance
Contemplating
A lovers Dance
Our raw desires
Once forsaken
Manipulating
Opportunities taken

Two become one
As bodies collide
Orchestrating
A fantasy ride
Sinful Passions
Uninhibited High
Hallucinating
Touching my thigh
Climactic Explosion
In harmony
Intoxicating
What you do to me.




Submitted on 2005-03-06 22:02:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  u do like this though i almost didn't you really don't get the same flow as you normally do when writing of such things as passion but well i guess it just depends the exact situation. with this poem it works not easily but it works i do like it as well as it's basic theme. good work and i hope to be able to read more of your stuff soon ;).
love and light
Archer
| Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Archer | [ Reply to This ]


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