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    dots Submission Name: Casperdots

    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Me
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       well not much for me to say but some of the stuff is suppose to be improper grammer and that I hope you like it. 1 love

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    I be the nigga named Casper
    No not that scary bitch ghost
    I be the man thats straight crazy
    I'll do some shady shit like making you kill your own family just so you can live then i'll have someone kill you

    I have no problem with seeing dead bodies
    But I do have problem with making them myself
    See it's like this i'm more of a sneaky can't be trusted kinda of theif I do shit like turning you against everyone.

    I'll have you so parinoid its not even funny...well to me at least.
    I'll have ya shaking and dreaming something terrible like a vietnam vet.
    But if you think thats bad i'm quick to set yo ass up for the feds or even worst i'll betray you and let punks who been tryin to kill go at you.

    But let me end this by giving you punk bitches some advice: TRUST NO ONE!

    Submitted on 2005-03-07 03:10:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      YOu can tell you are pissed, and really fu**ing mad at someone or some people. Let me think a best friend, girlfriend? I may be wrong.
    But I was drawn to this, because I have a teacher Mrs. Casper. So I was wondering what this write would be about. Well sorry to say, that she was one of the best teachers we had in 8th grade. Right into the last quarter she resigned. Which doesn't make any sense. Becuase she said seh was gonna retire in two years. We are all still wondering about that.

    Well If I got the point of the poem all messed up, im me anytime, and tell me what you were thinking when you wrote this. Cuz I really want to hear it.!

    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, definately got the impression that Casper is one creepin' motha! But in one line it doesn't seem like him...sorta outa character.

    'I'll have you so parinoid its not even funny...well to me at least.'

    The way it's worded it sounds like Casper is sayin that it's not funny to him, but in the poem he seems to be the type of guy who'd wanna see ya tweeking outa your mind. If that's the meaning you're tryin to get try something more like,
    'I'll have you so parinoid its not even funny...[except to] me at least.'

    If that's not the motive you're gettin at then I just want to know why he wouldn't find it funny. He seems like the type that would, ya know?
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      This missed man,-And if anybody is gonna like this its me man, and...ah...NO- You need tonm go back and I think[what I would do] is since its a slang and you attempted to not use an obvious form of rhyme which didnt work, go back and make it obvious with the words that you want to stress like Casper and maybe thief and throw a [censored] or two i their you know, I see waht you are trying to get at, I just think you if you are goinhg to write like this then FUK it make it straightr up blatant [censored] ass dope rhymes that a reader will choke on.
    I'll leave ya shaking and thinking something terible -what the heck is that you cant use slang[ya] and then say the words you'll be feeling terible thats awfull man, How bout sick or ill or something like that stick with the sla ng dont be like yo that dumb ho has one spectacular rear end on her. Know what I mean? anyway let me know what you decide to do with it, I d love to lend a hand if needed~L.t
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]

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