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    dots Submission Name: Nameless Warriordots
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    Author: WriterX
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Poland
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 68/126/83
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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    dotsNameless Warriordots
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    Nameless Warrior

    Droplets of blood turned into a puddle. A great sea of red liquid, which people fear, which people hate. Someone screamed, people ran, but it was too late. He was dead. Someone cried. No one thought. Who could it be? Who was he?

    A beggar from the streets, no one more. Leave him where he lies, let the body decompose. Why waste time on a nameless warrior, who once helped, but will never more? Leave him! Don't even touch him! It's a terrible thing that he died here, out in the street, and not in some dark hole, where vermins live.

    No one cares, who was he, what he has done. he is so little and unimportant. Why should anyone care? But although we humans have no feelings for the unimportant there are others who will care. The wild dogs will be satisfied enough with a meal, so good, as this.

    Leave the body where it lies, let the people watch. Maybe someone fast enough will see his final role. With time we all will end like this, forgotten by everyone. Who cares? No one. Why should anyone care?




    Submitted on 2005-03-07 08:33:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whats shakin? Ok that was alright, I like pieces like this describim g the faceless deaths that are simply forgotten, people die all the time like that bum down by the liwquor store but how long did it take you to notivce? Or who had to tell you? Know what I mean?-I think there is just something wrong with this line:
    It's a terrible thing that he died here, out in the street, and not in some dark hole, where vermins live
    Its the "out/in" part I think. Anyway their are a couple of other obvious ways to do it that zi am sure you dont need me to spell it out for you so thats about it , I liked it in a whole and its meaning I felt. I thought maybe it could have been a bit smoother here and there but nothing too drastic. See YA~L>t
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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